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The population for India and China has high growth drastically. Do you agree or disagree?

#population #india #china #growth
The graph illustrates the numbers of
India
 and
China
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China's
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population
 growth for the past 50 years in terms of billions. Overall, the country of
China
 has a high figure of
population
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the population
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 from the start
compares
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compared
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 to
India
.
However
, in the end,
India
 obtains the highest
population
 that
take
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takes
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 over
the
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China
.
In
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 the beginning of the year 2000,
India
 has only 1
billion
total
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in total
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of
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population
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the population
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 according to UN
Population
 Division: Medium variant,
however
,
China
 takes over approximately 250
billion
 more than
from
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India
. Both countries gradually increased and crossed over in the year 2030 at about 1.420
billion
 total
of
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residents. In the end,
China
 gradually plummetted
at
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to
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 about 1.4
billion
population
 in the year 2050 but
India
skyrocketted
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skyrocketed
 the number of
population
at
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to
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 1.6
billion
 which is higher
of
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by
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 about 200
billion
 in
compare
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 to
China
.
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