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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building.Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
Recently, smoking in public areas has been restricted in numerous countries.While some
people
 who smoke are complaining about the rules.Personally, I firmly agree with
this
 statement due to the negative effects of smoking.
This
 essay will provide both my opinions and
supportive
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 reasons.
First
 of all, smoking causes many physical health issues in the long term,
for
example
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 lung cancer, heart disease, stroke, and not only for
people
 who have been smoked but for all
people
 in the surroundings as the air contains smoke.It is clearly unfair for
non smoking
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people
 to inhale toxic air passively.Especially, in a closed space with no flowing air
such
 as an office.
Therefore
, the mental health of non-smokers might
also
 be affected.As they know that cigarettes are harmful
although
 they could not escape from the smoke in the room even not from themselves.Another problem
from
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a cigarette
the cigarette
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cigarette
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cigarettes
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 is that the smell is unpleasant for some others.Once the smell gets absorbed by hair,
clothings
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, or other textiles, it could stay for a whole day long and
difficult
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 to get rid
off
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.
This
 can easily increase levels of stress for individuals who are not fans of
cigarette
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cigarettes
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. In conclusion, smoking areas should be available in any public
places
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place
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 including buildings, for the convenience of smokers
thus
 they do not need to leave the building and comfort in
health
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the health
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 safety of
non smokers
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non-smokers
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.For the fairest way, individuals have to be
stricted
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restricted
 to the regulations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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