Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Today
music
is more than just a sound. It is one of the nice ways to connect
people
of various cultures and ages. Personally, I
am fully agree
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I will explain my point of view.
To begin
with, the
music
historically was created to send a message to other
people
via the sound
that is
fulfilled with the emotions and feelings of an author. From ancient times folk demonstrated their emotions with a peaceful sound and many
people
wanted to learn to play musical instruments to create the
music
.
This
was the
first
example of how
music
connected humans. Nowadays the
music
has a tone of genres and all of them have their own fans. These different types of
music
also
link
people
of different ages.
For instance
: Nirvana's hit called "Smells like teen spirit" illustrated the inner condition of
American
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people
in the 80s.
This
iconic song was played on every radio station, and it was listened to by any age. In my ,opinion
music
can bring
people
together and it does not matter in which part of the world do you listen to it or how old are you. It is
the
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feature of the
music
because the
music
is for everyone, and every human being can find his own favourite genre and find another guy who likes the same genre and be friends.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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