Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. To what extent do you agree?

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Dear IRCC Officer, I am writing

this

letter regarding my

biometric

information collection. I received an email that informed me to provide my

biometric

information at any collection service

centre

nearby before or on April 11th as my application for the permanent resident is about to be processed. Unfortunately, it seems unlikely to get my

biometric

information collected before

this

date. I am currently staying in Shanghai, China due

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personal reasons. The Canada

Visa

Centre

in the city has been cancelling my appointment several times in a row as the lockdown order continues and it remains closed due to the COVID-19 situation. My most recent appointment is on April 11th but there's no sign of lifting the lockdown until now. Even though I called and the

visa

centre

staff replied that all

biometric

collection services in Shanghai will be postponed automatically, I'm still worried that the lockdown will not be lifted shortly and the

visa

centre

won't reopen soon here.

Therefore

, I'd like to ask if it is possible to allow me more time to provide my

biometric

info

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or please kindly let me know if there is anything I need to do at

this

moment. I attached the temporarily closed notice from the Canada

Visa

Application

Centre

in Shanghai and their website link as well. Thank you for your time and have a good day=) Sincerely, Chang

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Fully explain your ideas

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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?