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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. To what extent do you agree?

#people #life #skill #boys #girls #schools #waste #school #time
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Dear IRCC Officer, I am writing
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 letter regarding my
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 information collection. I received an email that informed me to provide my
biometric
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 information at any collection service
centre
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 nearby before or on April 11th as my application for the permanent resident is about to be processed. Unfortunately, it seems unlikely to get my
biometric
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 information collected before
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 date. I am currently staying in Shanghai, China due
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 personal reasons. The Canada
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Centre
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 in the city has been cancelling my appointment several times in a row as the lockdown order continues and it remains closed due to the COVID-19 situation. My most recent appointment is on April 11th but there's no sign of lifting the lockdown until now. Even though I called and the
visa
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centre
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 staff replied that all
biometric
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 collection services in Shanghai will be postponed automatically, I'm still worried that the lockdown will not be lifted shortly and the
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centre
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 won't reopen soon here.
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, I'd like to ask if it is possible to allow me more time to provide my
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 info
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 or please kindly let me know if there is anything I need to do at
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 moment. I attached the temporarily closed notice from the Canada
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 Application
Centre
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 in Shanghai and their website link as well. Thank you for your time and have a good day=) Sincerely, Chang
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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