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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
Universities should accept in equal numbers that
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equality
 of gender can participate in every major. In my
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 I totally agree that any gender should
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 in the same way
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 others.
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 of all, many people believe that
men
 can mostly join any major or subject that they want due to their physical.
For example
 an engineering programme, In my country the majority of student who
study
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 in
this
 major is
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 because of the belief in work that most
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men
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the men
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 can do hard
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work
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 than
women
such
 as carry heavy things or even
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handle
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 project, which some
women
 might not make it. To contrary, I do not think that the
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 belief will work in present as long as
women
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 right
is
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 equal to
men
,
women
 might have physically weaker than
men
thus
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 abilities or skills are not different,
for
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 a female
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manager
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manger
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 who can deal with stubborn clients.
In addition
, universities should have
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criterion
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to
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 admission
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because
 the intention of studying is a significant purpose of students whether they are
men
 or
women
. People could study in any major if they would because it means they can do it better than anyone if it is something they like. In conclusion, those who
female
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 or male especially female should be determined to learn in every major which they want because it might be their dream or their
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further
 career and you would not destroy
anyone
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 dream through university entrance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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