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You recently ordered a small item online but when it arrived it was unusable. • give details about the order you made • explain what was wrong with the item • tell the company what you want them to do about it

#item #company
Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing to
complaint
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 about defect product that I bought from your prestigious online store. On Friday 14th March, I purchased a wireless Sony X400 microphone which came with one month warranty, and the order number is A6123BX. The problem with the microphone is that it appears to cut out at random intervals when it is being used. These cut-outs can
last
 for as long as seven seconds at a time,
although
 they usually
last
 for around two to three seconds. I have been experiencing
this
 issue for about one week since I received the parcel. Since your coShould the problem
be
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 a defect, I would be grateful if you could rectify
this
 issue by providing me with a refund at your earliest opportunity.
However
, if you believe it is a simple case of user error, I would appreciate some guidance on how to resolve the issue. Thank you for your cooperation. Yours faithfully, John Smith
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