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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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Learning about other
cultures
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are
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 getting easier by using available resources, like books, films, and the internet;
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, it is noteworthy to bear in mind that an accurate understanding
about
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 those
cultures
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 can not be obtained only by these means. I believe that travelling to different countries is essential and the following essay will look at two rationales behind my notion.
Firstly
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, those resources do not tell all of
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 and
usually
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 negative facts
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cultures
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 are
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omitted
 from social media.
This
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 is because
,
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 there is
a
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strict supervision over the content of every information you can find about a country.
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, a great number of non-scientific beliefs are not being written due to the fear of a negative global
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judgment
. Since those beliefs are
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 an integral part of
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, travelling to learn
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 in person is needed for having a meticulous understanding
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cultures
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.
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, the parts of
cultures
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 that are remaining in capitals usually are available while these
cultures
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 are consisting of various customs, which are only being held in small villages.
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, local people, who are deprived of social media, still are celebrating occasions that are neglected in big cities.
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, visiting those areas and talking with those people give us a chance to learn fundamental parts of a culture. To sum up,
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 social media has been expanding a lot of information about unknown
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, it can not substitute
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 importance of travelling to learn
a
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culture. I believe because the information
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 being chosen to be written and the integral parts are hidden in rural areas, travelling still required to know a culture.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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