Some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History.Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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opinion
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that
History
is an essential
subject
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a
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academic.On the opposition ,in
this
new
era
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science
and
technology
should be focused more.In my
opinion
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science
and
technology
are
more
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essential
part
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of the
subject
.
Science
and
technology
plays
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vital
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role in the world. Because of
science
and
technology
world has been developed rapidly and still changing.
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like
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smart phone
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smartphone
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,televisions,
airplane
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etc
..
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This
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all
are
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studied
science
and able to produce good outcomes.If
science
and
technology
is
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given
more
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important part
on
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studies
people
of thinking power will increase too. If there is more
technology
people
do not have to work by physically,nor have to suffer.
Now days
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people
also
get more job opportunities with good salary those who had studied
science
and
technology
than the
history
. So it should
be gives
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more essential to
science
and
technology
subject
. Other opposition says
history
should
gives
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more essential
on
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to
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academic
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.Because
history
tells about the ancient culture.In
oder
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order
to preserve culture,should learn more
history
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about history
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.Maintaining own culture and
traditional
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traditions
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is important to preserve own country.so that's why
history
should be given more
important
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in
a
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academic.
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not
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a list
science
and
technology
should be studied more in
oder
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order
to develop
further
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more
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in future.As given in
previous
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sentence
that
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science
and
technology
can make
the
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people
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lifestyle easier and makes
more
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comfort
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.In the
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mean
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meanwhile
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while
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History
should be taken as
minor
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a minor
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subject
.
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  • sustain
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