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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world, by raising the
crime
 rate individuals get concerned about and think there should be established
penalizing
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 for every kind of
crime
. Other people believe that the decision for
punishment
 is related to different situations and other elements. It seems
punishment
 would be changeable due to
evidences
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evidence
pieces of evidence
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 and
variety
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the variety
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 of
crime's
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crime
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type
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types
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. Possibly, in my
eyes
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 there are many kinds of
petties
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parties
such
 as intentional or unintentional and
punishment
 is changeable for them.
For example
, for murdering
as
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is
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 an intentional
crime
, authorities should determine imprisonment forever. Because
that is
 the highest level of
crime
 and it would
hurts
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to
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apply
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people in society.
However
, for drug-related petties,
the
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a
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 fine or three to five years
prison
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in prison
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 is a suitable
punishment
.
Consequently
,
for
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apply
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deciding about penalizing should
analyzing
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analyse
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 the elements
such
 as mental health and it has
impact
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an impact
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 on the
punishment
,
also
 people
if
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who
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 had
mental
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a mental
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 illness, their
crime
 would be unintentional and it changes
punishment
. In against side, it would not impossible to determine fixed penalizing.
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Examples
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Example
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An example
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 can be seen as financial crimes. But in my
view
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,view
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 these
punishment
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punishments
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 are not feasible and it is advisable to determine based on individual
condition
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conditions
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. In conclusion, it is reasonable to fix
punishment
with
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by
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evaluation
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evaluating
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the
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of the
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 situation or mental health and motivation of
guilty
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the guilty
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 person.
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