Some believe that nuclear weapons benefit the world at large. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s
world
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, nuclear arsenals have been playing
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role in humanity.
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, it is argued that it has some merits to the
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to large extent;
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, from my angle,I strongly disagree with
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notion since it can conducive to some probable serious problems in people’s life. On the one hand, nuclear bombs can be clearly viewed that
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contributes
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to becoming the end of the
world
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in some cases.
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, not only does it destroys the
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world
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safety, but
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it has detrimental impacts on the
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generation’s life.
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, what
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entails is that health issues could be observed
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like
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incident.To illustrate, it is
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terminal disease that cancer is terminated by
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the atomic
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bomb.
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,
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disease
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to the Black Sea of Turkey ,
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, people influenced by cancer
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suffered
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the
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long period of
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time.
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, if the tremendous effects of the atomic bomb
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remembered by people, they will understand why it is harmful to
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world
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.
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, some countries
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have nuclear weapons are
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to others by virtue of the conflict between the countries. What is more, these
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governments
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cannot reach a consensus on borders, thereby, they frighten their worldwide citizens by using bombs.
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, nowadays people are faced with
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war between Russia and Ukraine, and
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cases Putin, who is the leader of Russia indicates to use their nuclear arsenals. Taking everything into account, having considered
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sides of nuclear weapons, it has
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not
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beneficial features to the
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as well as humankind.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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