Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In recent
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, the
environment
is
more
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changing due to the development of the world. According to some
people
, the main
of
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environment
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problems
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is the disappearance of particular
species
of
plants
and
animals
. While others believe that there are more important environmental
problems
in the world. In my opinion, there are even bigger causes of concern.
Firstly
, there are more imperative issues of the
environment
. Global warming,
green house
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or climate change, which are making threats against human
life
, is even more alarming
problems
worldwide.
For instance
, there are
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of
people
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every year because of natural
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. I believe that if we do not have any method to solve these
problems
, human
life
would be getting worse.
Secondly
, along with
environment
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problems
threats
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and threats
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to human
life
, water pollution which
contributed
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by waste from industry
area
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and garbage from some
people
without no sense, is leading to
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to
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human health.
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, a large of
people
are facing
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health
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problem
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such
as cancer or cholera because they were using unclearly water or dirty food. I think protecting
fresh water
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from becoming polluted should take
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priority.
On the other hand
, the main problem that
people
believe that particular
species
of
plants
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animals
is
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losing
,
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is the imbalance in nature. The imbalance ecosystem is
actually
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significant
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issue, that would be
leaded
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to
lose
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a
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large number of essential sources
to
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human
life
.
For example
, human is taking the house of the number of
animals
by cutting down
tree
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for their
benefits
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. Not only makes a lot of
difference
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species
plants
reduce but
also
animals
do not have
place
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to exist. To summarize,
although
the disappearance of particular
species
of
plants
and
animals
is an
environment
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problems
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that we need to carry about, we should focus on
another issues
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about
environment
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the environment
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which is more
harm
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on
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human
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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