Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

When it comes to the topic of

children

’s

leisure

activities

, some people think these

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ought to be educational,

otherwise

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it’s

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will be meaningless and

time

-consuming. In my opinion. I believe that

children

should spare their free

time

on their interests

instead

of having imposed by their parents to carry out some so-called tutorial courses.

To begin

with, engaging

some

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leisure

activities

,

such

as singing, dancing, and painting

are

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essential for the

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development of

children

.

This

is because these interests can largely improve youngsters’ thinking ability and provide

opportunity

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for them to express creativity. In

such

cases, they can indulge in hobbies deeply and make friends with like-minded people, as well as enhance their capabilities in expressing and discussing.

Furthermore

, extracurricular

activities

are essential for kids to keep healthy neither

in

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physical

or

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mental. I mean,

children

today have a hectic schedule especially when they

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start schooling.

Thus

, if we still require kids

spend

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leisure

time

on

activities

related to the academic content, it’s difficult for them to release their pressure from school. In

such

case

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,

children

will be over-stressed, and even they will be prone to have various health problems,

such

as depression.

Therefore

,

children

should choose their own hobbies in their free

time

in order to keep fit physically and mentally. In conclusion, I strongly believe that

leisure

time

should be granted to

children

themselves, and it ultimately benefits

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their comprehensive development.