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Some people believe that parents should be responsible for encouraging their children to take regular exercise. Others argue that the main responsibility for encouraging children to do so should lie with schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Parents
 play
essential
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 role in every
children
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life
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 in the most difficult situations where
children
 need most parental advice.
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individual
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 say that
parents
 must be blameworthy for
support
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 their
children
 to continue physical activities. Nowadays, the health state of young
children
 is at an
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 rate as most of them are suffering from obesity and weak immune system. There are several controversial arguments involving whether
parents
 or schools should be responsible for encouraging them to take regular
exercise
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both perspectives and give my own idea.
First
 of all, it is generally believed that
parents
 have more opportunities to share time with their
children
 and teach them good habits.
Moreover
, taking
exercise
 from
young
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 age can form a healthy lifestyle during their lifelong and
thus
, difficult to be given up. Some
parents
also
 do that with their
children
 to be a good
model
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 as well as draw in them a basic awareness of health protection.
In addition
, every pair of
parents
 usually have one to two
children
, which means they can give enough care and attention to their
children
’s health while it is impossible at a school with thousands of students.
On the other hand
, not all
parents
 are available to spend too much time with their
children
 and have enough knowledge on
exercise
 for kids. In
this
 case, schools are proved to be a reliable place for
this
 mission as they are
quipped
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 with suitable facilities and
human
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humans
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 to maintain students’ physical performance.
Furthermore
,
children
 usually find it easier to keep
disciplines
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 at
schools
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 and sometimes are enthusiastic to take
exercise
 with their friends. All things considered, I firmly believe that
this
 is both schools’ and
parents
’ responsibility to encourage
children
 to take
exercise
 regularly because it can give them more motivation and conditions to keep healthy.
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