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Goverments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extened do you agree or disagree with this statement

#goverments #money #railways #roads
There is a current
belife
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belief
 among some
group
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 of people, which asserts
goverments
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governments
government
 should invest mostly
on
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 extending railways rather than
roads
. I
tottaly
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totally
 disagree with the mentioned statement, due to some reasons, which in the following essay would be elaborated
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Firstly
,
now a days
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, after the mechanisation of
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the atuomobile
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atuomobile
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automobile
 industry, the popularity of using a privet car as a
mean
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 of transportation has increased in comparison with the
first
 of the 20th
centurty
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century
. It might be obvious that most
of
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people
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the people
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 prefer to maintain their privacy in the modernised world, henceforth, owning a car would be a better option for them. To elaborate;
traveling
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travelling
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 around with
vehicels
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vehicles
, which are purchased by
indiviuals
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individuals
,
provide
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provides
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 the
dirvers
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drivers
 with more
mobilty
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mobility
in
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on
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 the
roads
. According to a study conducted on
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Amazing
Amizing
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 Talker website, which has indicated that 95
percent
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 of American people prefer to
utalise
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utilise
 privet cars, for these
option
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options
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 of transportation
ehnance
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enhance
 their
capabilty
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capability
 of movement on the
roads
.
Secondly
, approximately all the public
transportaion
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transportation
, including railways, has fixed stations,
therefore
 it reduces the
travelrs'
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travellers
travel
 possible destinations.
Although
public
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 transportation system has endeavoured all over the world to expand itself, there are numerous destinations of, even daily
passangers
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passengers
,
that
is
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are
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 difficult to reach by train. Reader digest has published some statistics, which illustrated that sixty
percent
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 of daily commuters of Theran rather
to
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driver
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 their cars into their
work place
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workplace
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, despite the exhausting traffic.
This
 is due to many hard to reach
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the location
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location
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locations
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 of offices and organizations, where
railway
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the railway
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 system has not been
expaned
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expanded
. In
conclusion
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 I
tottaly
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totally
 disagree with the idea of injecting more money
to
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into
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 the budget of
railways
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the railways
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 system than
roads
, because of the privacy and
accessiblity
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accessibility
 of
the
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privet vehicles.
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