: Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion

In our society,
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, many people think that the best way to travel in cities is using a car,
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however
others believe the bicycles are better. In my opinion, I believe
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using
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bicycle
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better choice because is more sustainable. On one hand, exploring a city,
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and riding
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a bicycle can be a very good option for a lot of
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.
First
of all is a way to
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maintain
our bodies healthy and fit,
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can give us the possibility to enjoy the
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journey
following our own
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rhythm
and
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cheap and most important, it does not create any form of pollution as it
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with cars.
On the other hand
, driving a car into the city, can give you the chance to transport with you more people and
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stack
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in a traffic jam even for hours and certainly it
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a lot of air pollution that we
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everyday
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.
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by the University of Maine,
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the
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85% of
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we breath is polluted and
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30% of
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pollution is
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generated
by cars. To conclude, even if driving cars is by many the better choice to transit in cities, in my
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bicycle
remain
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the
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sustainable
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we all should consider.
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