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Internet is dangerous .Do you agree or disagree to this.

#internet
The
internet
 is a wonderful tool that helps us to find informations easily,to stay connected with each other everywhere.
However
 the
internet
 is dangerous for us.
for example
, now different hackers have invented various fake sites to make easy money on the
internet
.
Firstly
,many people are deceived.
For instance
 ,they lose their personal information by sending passwords or card numbers without knowing it.
Otherwise
, hackers can spread various dangerous viruses on computers.
This
 caused many problems. But every evil has a good side as well as the
internet
. Of course,there are sites on the
internet
 that provide us with security. In conclusion,every online person on the net should be careful with every incoming message,not send
addresess
Correct your spelling
addresses
address
,passwords,phone numbers and others to strangers.When posting a picture or video to a profile or other,it is
is
Remove the redundancy
apply
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important to keep
mind
Change preposition
in mind
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 that strangers may see it,store it and distribute
Correct pronoun usage
it to
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to
Change preposition
in
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 various forms.
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