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6. More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#companies #employees #work #home #development
Many companies are given permission to entrepreneurs to
work
at
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own
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their own
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house
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houses
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.workers do not need to go office for
work
.
Definitely
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 the growth of enterprises will
be impact
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 due to
lack
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a lack
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 of cooperation among the members and leads to
decline
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the decline
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of
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in
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 economic development.Doing alone at home cannot complete
schedule
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 on time.
Firstly
,
Task
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 cannot be done as per the plan.Online
work
 will
be always delay
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 because of
social
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 network
problem
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problems
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,sometimes distracted by family and social media messages etc
..
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 Rather than having one idea,it would be good to have more points from employees at
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institution
insitution
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the insitution
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. Operating
to
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too
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 much at
place
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the place
a place
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 of residence
,
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 may lose
of
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apply
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profits and collision of economic development
to
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of
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 the country. Concluding the statement,
laborer's
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laborers
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 should not be
work
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working
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 at home.There will be so many
drawback
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 to
the
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apply
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economic development.Due to the single scheme and that cannot be
prove
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proven
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 whether it can succeed or not. At
last
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 it may
chances
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 of banning the business because of always diminishing the value. In
Oder
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the Oder
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 to gain more financial,Laborers should always go
at
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to
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office
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the office
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 to
work
 together.
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