Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology, and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encourage more people to take interest in the arts?.

Art

plays a vital role in all cultures globally; but in the present generation, lesser

people

day-by-day appreciate

art

. Science, Technology, and Business turned

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have focused on

people

. In my opinion, the modern world is fast revolving, wherein

art

is left behind, and to have encouraged them to eye for

art

, introducing it at an early age can make it possible. On one hand,

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society welcomed well the technological innovation which kept the global economy rise. Each country develops for survival mode;

thus

, science, technology, and business are the hot topic for it.

Moreover

,

people

weigh what is popular at the moment, so the attention revolved around that matter.

For example

, the company for high machinery items are always updating every year, so the awareness and the hype of that item boost the

people

,

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and ended buying the material.

On the other hand

,

Art

should

be introduce

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at an early age; making them see and realize how precious

art

in our society can have bigger change.

Moreover

, education plays essential activity

for

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art

and it should have applied

in

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to

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school

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curriculum. During the students are studying;

therefore

,

unlocked

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the gate to

art

is possible because

child

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children

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appreciate even the small things.

For instance

my niece, every time I draw to her no matter what shape, she

appreciate

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it.

Thus

at the same

time

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,time

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art

is slowly

being introduce

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. In conclusion,

an

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art

is being

diminish

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each day because of

the

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modern

technology

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technological

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innovation and

art

is encouraged to have started while young.