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Motorized flight is the greatest invention in the modern world. No other invention has had a more significant impact on our lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It’s certainly true that the
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 of motorized flight has had a profound impact on both our lifestyles and society as a whole. But I feel it is unfair to downplay the role of other equally, if not more, important inventions. In a sense, the advent of motorized flight has brought dramatic changes to
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 as well as cargo transportation. For one thing, it is by far the fastest means of transportation. What used to be a good ten-hour ride by car can now be easily covered in one hour and a half by air. For another, it is as safe as it is fast. The number of deaths from
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crash
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 is much less than that of any other means of
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. On the strengths of these two advantages,
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the motorized
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 flight is widely used for industrial, commercial, military and other purposes, and is gradually changing the
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 business is conducted, travel plans are made, and wars are fought. I am definitely not suggesting that it is the most important
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 ever. It is only one of many which have greatly transformed the modern world. The
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 of the Internet is a good case in point. To some degree, it is even more important than the transportation revolution in that it has reshaped the
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 we study, the
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 we entertain, the
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 we work, or even the
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 we socialize, by putting a large part of human activities online. Of
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 there are quite a few other inventions
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 as genetic engineering, breakthroughs in medical science, etc., which are as important as the two inventions mentioned above. Human progress results from the combined efforts of various forces and it is improper to attribute it to any single
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