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These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

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In the fast-paced world, people tend to change
jobs
 more than ever to learn new and trending things which they cannot get from their current
jobs
 or sometimes the reasons for switching
jobs
 could be a good position or a better salary. Considering
this
 trend
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we can see that there are more advantages when it comes to
employees
 but there are some drawbacks for the companies.
Firstly
, As mentioned above it is good for
employees
 to switch
jobs
 to get better learning opportunities
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 and better positions
along with
 other perks and benefits.
for example
, If a person
is
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 working in
the
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 middle-level position for more than 3 years and
he
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can't see any growth
so
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he tends to switch
jobs
 where he can get good compensation and a better position. but there could be some disadvantages for even an employee as his resume will show frequent job-hopping which will make the new company think twice before hiring that person.
Secondly
, The disadvantage is
also
 for the companies as they spend their time and money on hiring new
employees
 and training them, It means that companies are investing in them but if
employees
are changing
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jobs
, it will be problematic for employers to go again through the hiring process.
for example
, a person is hired for the data analytics job, so the company will teach him new data analytics tools which most of the time is paid and sharing crucial company data with them and after he leaves the job all the money spent on tools and time will go in vain.
Thus
, we can say that
employees
 have advantages in switching
jobs
 but employers have to suffer and face maximum disadvantages. In
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conclusion, I reaffirm the fact that the trend of job-hopping is increasing and sometimes it is good as people get to learn new things, and new corporate culture but it can affect the credibility of an employee.
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