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IN a number of countries , some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities.Other believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport

#countries #people #sums #money #railway #lines #trains #cities #transport
In some nations,
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 of individual
believe
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 that government spend more amount of
fortune
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a fortune
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 to start novel railway lines for fast
trains
 in
the
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urban areas.Few opine that amount ought to be spent on improvement of
those mode
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that mode
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 of
transport
 which are actively working.I will discuss both views with my opinion in the upcoming paragraphs. On the
one
 hand,
government
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the government
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 of every nation spend the public money on
construction
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the construction
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 of fast railway tracks it will be
benefical
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beneficial
 for every
middle class
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 person and
also
 on
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environment
enviornment
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.To be more precise, in the case of emergency
one
 person who is not able to hire any taxi since of high rate and
also
 they want to reach their destination earlier
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 it will be helpful.
Moreover
, government
transport
 is less expensive rather than
personal
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a personal
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 mode of transportation.It will be helpful for
eco-system
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 of
nation
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beacause
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because
 maximum people try to avoid to commute
one
 place to another by their personal
vechicles
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vehicles
.
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, According to an article
publesh
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published
publish
 in 'The Tribune' in 2020 , some developed nations have declined in
enviornment
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environment
issue
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issues
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 due to fast
trains
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that
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have started in the towns.
On the other hand
, some people think that it is
also
 important to improve the facilities of those transports
whcih
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which
 is on working.In most
of
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countries
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the countries
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 , there are
not
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no
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 appropriate seating
arrangents
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arrangements
 on buses ,
trains
 or autorikshaws> Most
of
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people
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the people
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 travel their whole journey while standing.It is the duty of
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government
governemnt
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 to start the medical facility on
trains
 and buses.In the
casee
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case
cases
 of
first
aid
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 it can be helpful.
Furthermore
, rates should be less because most of the labourers travel through
these mode
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 of public
transportaion
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transportation
.
Moreover
, potholes should be closed by local
authorties
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authorities
 so that
person
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people
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 can be commuted comfortably .
Also
, increase the safety measures by installing cameras inside the
trains
 and buses.
As a result
, it can help passengers if they lost their
belogings
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belongings
.
For instance
, In 2019 , data collected by
local
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 newspaper
of
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United
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 Kingdom the theft cases is reduced by jet speed and reached
at
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20% after applying
CCTV's
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 in public
transport
. In conclusion, After discussing both views.I think new technology of
transport
 plays a vital role in these days owing to
time
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 problem.Individuals can easily commute from
one
 place to another in less time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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