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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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driverless
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car
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aslo
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also
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support
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 people to take the taste of new
technology
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people
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on
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.
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accident
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. The automatic sensor
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is
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 in the
vehicle
.When a person
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 in front of
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 suddenly, it will stop as soon as possible. The
drawbacks
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 of
this
vehicle
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 sometimes
its
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 cannot
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recognize
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use
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 a car he will concentrate fully but
a
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inteligence
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intelligence
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vehicle
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decision
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 quickly.
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, many drivers lose their jobs because of
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of
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death.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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