Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amount of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brough up by wealthy parents. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
A
poority
is a major problem around the world. While,It has been observed Correct your spelling
priority
poorly
by
many countries that,students who Change preposition
in
belongs
from Change the verb form
belong
a poor families
Correct the article-noun agreement
poor families
a poor family
they
have difficulties to an arrange money for Correct pronoun usage
apply
studies
.While,some people believe that, the Correct pronoun usage
their studies
education
authorities can release some facilities
for them.I agree with a notion to a large extent,my statement will be elaborated further
.
To begin
with, why the poor children have though
to survive while Correct your spelling
thought
study
. To answer it, there are many things needed for Wrong verb form
studying
education
,like rent house, meal,dinner,elecricity
bill,book.These types Correct your spelling
electricity
all expense
quite difficult for Add a hyphen
all-expense
a
poor pupils to arrange. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Therefore
,education
system could supply a free hostel room along with lunch as well as dinner, Correct article usage
the education
free
Correct word choice
and free
book
.Fix the agreement mistake
books
For example
, in India
the government colleges have all the free Add a comma
,India
facilities
for a tribal community.
Furthermore
, the university can offer some part-time job
to Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
this student
,towards Fix the agreement mistake
these students
it
they can earn some money for their daily needs.Correct pronoun usage
which
For instance
,70% of American pupil
do a part-time job in their own campus like in the library, canteen.Fix the agreement mistake
pupils
Thus
, this
idea can be beneficial for rural
Add an article
the rural
a rural
child
,if they have these Fix the agreement mistake
children
thypes
of job Correct your spelling
types
facilities
.
On the other hand
, we cannot ignore the facilities
from
the government universities. Nowadays, Change preposition
of
authority
Fix the agreement mistake
authorities
providing
Wrong verb form
provides
the
large amount of a scholarship to all poor as well Change the article
a
middle class
Add a hyphen
middle-class
Correct your spelling
children
childrens
for their all needs,Correct your spelling
children
also
have a free hostel including meals.Correct word choice
and also
For example
, the Canadian government supplying
200 Wrong verb form
supplies
dollar
per student.
In conclusion,it has been accounted that tribal Change to a plural noun
dollars
Correct your spelling
children
childrens
have Correct your spelling
children
a difficulties
surviving while Correct the article-noun agreement
difficulties
a difficulty
education
.I believe that this
situation can be solve
by Change the verb form
be solved
authorities
.Correct article usage
the authorities
Hence
, poor pupils can complete studies
without difficulties.Correct pronoun usage
their studies
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