Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that the main environmental issue of our time is the disappearance of particular species of animals and plants. While I agree that
this
does affect the environment, I believe that the global warming issue is far more important. Every year there is at least one type of animal or plant at risk of extinction. Excessive hunting has contributed to the loss of these species.
For example
, white rhinoceroses are almost extinct due to the mass hunting for their horns.
However
, I believe that global warming has a far
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greater impact
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the overall environment. Global warming has been a problem for the longest time. Over the past few years, our Earth's temperature has
going
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up
as a result
of
greenhouse
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effect, which leads to the ice melting in the two Poles,
threating
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threatening
the lives of the polar bears.
Consequently
, it
also
causes the rise of the sea level and shifts the season. To conclude, while the loss of particular species of animals and plants is a problem, there is a greater problem that the world has to deal with, which is global warming.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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