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Full time university students spend most of the time to studying. They should be doing other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disaggre

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Since most
the
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scholars spend most of their time at university and school,
also
 they should be focusing on some extra
activities
 to enhance their brain
activities
. while
,
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this
 approach is considered the best method up to some extent,
this
 is far from being the best.
Firstly
, outside
activities
 enhance social
skills
. The
students
 who are taking part in other
activities
, they develop many
skills
such
 as good communication
skills
, work in team co-operate with each other and so on.
For example
, it is observed that the
students
 who are doing other
activities
 have many more
skills
 than the
students
 who do not take part in other
activities
. Nowadays, these
skills
 are very important for doing a good job because employers look for social
skills
in addition
 to academic qualifications.
Hence
,
students
 should develop social
skills
 if they want better jobs in future.
Moreover
, outside
activities
 are helpful in learning.
Students
 can concentrate more on their studies, after taking part in curricular
activities
 like
,
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 dance, games and hobbies, they enjoy the most and forget their worries and freshen up their minds which helps them to learn easily. So, the pupils are more active.
Furthermore
, scholars spend quality time with their peers and make
a
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good
relationship
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. In
this
 way, they learn teamwork and develop a mutual understanding and
understand
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each
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 other.  To conclude,
students
 should spend some time on extracurricular
activities
 along with their studies because it improves their strong
skills
 for leading life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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