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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #money #railways #roads
The pie chart demonstrates information about employment in the United Kingdom in 1998 and 2012.
This
 pie chart contains details
such
 as the gender of employees and whether they are working a full-time or a part-time job.
To begin
 with, It seems like the vast majority of workers are male and most of them have full-time jobs and their number had a slight increase which is insignificant compared to other categories.
Moreover
, more men tend to work part-time jobs in 2012.
This
 increase,
however
, does not seem to be significant compared to other categories.
On the other hand
, the percentage of women in full-time occupations has increased since 1998 (approximately 7 per cent).
Furthermore
, there was a small increase in the number of women who work a part-time job, but its percentage has decreased. Overall, Given the current information, more women can be seen in workplaces in the UK since 1998.
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  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
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