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What are the merits and demerits of globalization on developing nations?

#merits #demerits #globalization #nations
Gobalization
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Globalization
 defines
performance
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the performance
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 of
nation
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a nation
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 in each sector i.e economics, cultures, cross-border
trade
 in goods and
services
,
technology
, and flow of investment.
Further
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,Further
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i
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 will be
elobrating
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elaborating
celebrating
merits
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the merits
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 and demerits of
globalization
 in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraph. To start with,
globalization
 helps in the manner of transfer of
technology
throught
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through
throughout
 the globe which can be useful for us. Any
country
 can borrow
technology
 through the agreement and implement
in
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it in
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 their
country
 for overall development.
Globalization
 always
ensure
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ensures
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 us better
services
by
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through
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 the advancement in
technology
 through our
services
 like water supply, electricity, internet which are helpful for
overall
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the overall
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 development of
country
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the country
a country
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. With
the
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apply
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access to the latest
technology
,
country
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the country
a country
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 can
provides
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provide
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 affordable products to its countrymen. For
instances
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instance
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, Apple company is
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a
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popular brand
of
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in
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USA
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the USA
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 which is technological developed.
Company
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The company
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 provides its product at affordable prices to their countrymen. On the
otherhand
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other hand
,
globalization
keep
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keeps
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 doing good is not always true it impacts us in
multidimesional
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multidimensional
multi dimensional
 ways. it can create inequality
throught
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throughout
through
 the world by increasing
specialization
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the specialization
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 of their
trade
.
Although
, specialization of their
trade
 helps to boost the per capita income which increases poverty.
Globalization
 demand
for
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apply
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high-skilled work
with
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at
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 cheaper
price
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prices
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. But countries
where
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, where institution are weak,
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institution
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institutions
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are
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is
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 weak won't be able
produce
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to produce
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 highly skilled
worker
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workers
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 as result increases
unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate. Balance of
trade
 refers to
balance
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the balance
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 of values between
country's
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a country's
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import
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imports
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 and export through
good
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goods
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 and
services
.
For example
, crude oil is
export
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exported
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 from
middel
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middle
 east countries which is more affordable in their
country
 but for
imported
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importing
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countries
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,countries
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 it is
more
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costlier. To conclude,
globalization
affects
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effects
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in
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an
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equal
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an equal
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 manner towards merits and demerits depends mainly on
performance
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the performance
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 of every sector in
country
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the country
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.
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