What are the pros and cons for children of watching television?

In today’s era of modern technology, watching
television
is
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common indoor activity in today’s life. In many
families
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it is obvious that
children
are interested in spending their
time
in front of
television
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. But what ate the benefits of watching
children
’s
television
and what are some
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drawbacks? I will look at both sides and try to draw some
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.
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the
beginning
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I want to address some benefits of TV for
children
. One of the main positives is that it has many educational shows which can be informative and proper for them. What I mean by
this
is that by watching documentaries and adventure ones they can broaden their mind
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universe
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.
furthermore
, there
are
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also
variety
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of animated cartoons
which
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help kids to have a greater understanding of human character and their life
attitude
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. Even they will be able to learn
new
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ability
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, for instant language, unassisted. Turning to the other side of the coin, spending lots of
time
on TV can
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a negative effect on
children
’s mental, emotional and physical improvement. So they will not reach their significant and descent milestones as they grow up.
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majority of middle-aged
children
who devote their
time
on
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it are suffering from obesity which is considered
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health
issues
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. Another problem is that others might feel a bit
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of separation
,
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because
instead
of playing with
children
and spending more
time
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peers they stay isolated. To sum up, both sides were reviewed and
television
is full of profitable information. But we still need to organize a proper schedule
of
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watching TV for
children
. I am sure that the positives of watching
television
outweigh any disadvantages.
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  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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