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What are the pros and cons for children of watching television?

#children #television
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In today’s era of modern technology, watching
television
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 is
very
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 common indoor activity in today’s life. In many
families
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 it is obvious that
children
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 are interested in spending their
time
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 in front of
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television
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the television
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. But what ate the benefits of watching
children
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’s
television
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 and what are some
their
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of their
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 drawbacks? I will look at both sides and try to draw some
conclusion
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.
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 the
beginning
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 I want to address some benefits of TV for
children
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. One of the main positives is that it has many educational shows which can be informative and proper for them. What I mean by
this
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 is that by watching documentaries and adventure ones they can broaden their mind
of
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universe
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the universe
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.
furthermore
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, there
are
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also
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variety
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a variety
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 of animated cartoons
which
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 help kids to have a greater understanding of human character and their life
attitude
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. Even they will be able to learn
new
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ability
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, for instant language, unassisted. Turning to the other side of the coin, spending lots of
time
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 on TV can
has
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 a negative effect on
children
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’s mental, emotional and physical improvement. So they will not reach their significant and descent milestones as they grow up.
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,
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 majority of middle-aged
children
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 who devote their
time
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on
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 it are suffering from obesity which is considered
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 health
issues
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. Another problem is that others might feel a bit
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 of separation
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 because
instead
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 of playing with
children
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 and spending more
time
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 among
the
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 peers they stay isolated. To sum up, both sides were reviewed and
television
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 is full of profitable information. But we still need to organize a proper schedule
of
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for
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 watching TV for
children
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. I am sure that the positives of watching
television
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 outweigh any disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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