Most of the people spend money without thinking about saving it for future. What are the main reasons ? Give your opinion.

The majority of the population do huge expenditures unconsciously keeping zero
amount
ahead. In order to fulfil their immediate needs as well as because of the expensive ,
world
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they tend to restrain themselves from saving.
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essay will discuss the main reasons before giving my opinion. Today's individuals are lacking patience and they invest a great budget for immediate satisfaction. By doing
this
they lose their money with nothing
on
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aside.
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, commonly
people
are found more into shopping
such
as clothing, furniture whose
amount
decreases once bought ,unlike lands or
jewelleries
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which tend to increase over time.One very important thing about the extensive facilities of providing
a Credit cards
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to the population left and right so they feel very easy and tempting to buy any
amount
of whatever goods they take fancy as they think they have all the money in their hands forgetting that one day they all have to pay back everything to the bank. I, think
this
kind of unhealthy habit should be modified by keeping aside at least 5 per cent of monthly income
into
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a high interest saving account at a bank.
Moreover
, another reason for randomly spending
the
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high number of income is due to the expensive market. Nowadays, the cost of every item has soared compared to the past.
This
left citizens with no choice
than
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to spend all their money. For an instance, the cost of gold in the
nepali
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market has sky-rocketed crossing a hundred thousand for a tola; in the present year 2022,
however
, it was below 50 thousand just a decade ago. I, think
people
should always buy judiciously rather than going on a shopping spree to buy any damn things they have their eyes on. In conclusion, expenses done by
people
have peaked
then
it's saving. In order to get on the spot happiness and skyrocketed pricetag in the commercial sector
has
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compelled
people
to invest keeping zero
amount
in the bank as saving for
future
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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