The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To wh/t extent do you agree with this statement?

Dear cousin Mary, How are you? I am fine and thank you very much for sending me these passages. The reason why I am writing to you is that I have
finally
made my decision about whether or not I should go to
university
. As you know, going to
university
has its own advantages. As far as I know, each
university
has
itself
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career week where students are allowed to explore the career they are interested in, which I think is a good opportunity to learn more about the job market. Most
of
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the
universities
also
got career advisors who will help you to prepare for your interviews and give you some suggestions. Another thing about going to
universities
is that I can get the chance to develop my communication skills and
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gain some precious work experience through different kinds of activities.
For example
, by taking a part-time job or creating new projects and groups inside the
university
. Unfortunately, going to
university
also
has its downsides and the
first
one is the high cost. I know that there are a lot of students who left their
universities
with huge student debts and I do not wish to do the same. But luckily, there are
also
universities
who
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offer loans to students which I think is a good solution to my financial problem, since the loan can cover both the tuition fee and my living costs. Another possible downside of
university
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is probably the exhausting study routine and missing the chance of trying out something new. But for me, I believe that I can manage the study routine
in
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the same I have managed during my high school time and I do not think I am actually ready to quit learning. In the end, I have decided that I should go to
university
rather than going to work directly. In my opinion, I think that
universities
can offer you some lessons you need to know before going to work and I certainly will not regret it. I hope my letter was not too long and please greet your family for me Best regards
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