Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip

Dear Paul Brown, I am writing
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trip
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by the school to New York
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for three days asking
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parents to
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their children. Am very
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to come along with my children as Kevin
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some health issues and
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desired
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time it would be great if
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could be there with him so there will be less chance of missing his meds.
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years back
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was working in a construction company in the same city
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many towers am still in touch with them and
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currently
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Tower building which is the most common visitors attraction.I can certainly help you
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. Eventually,
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would like to
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park office are they open or still close? Have you finalized the departure dates ? Please feel free to revert me looking forward
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your response. Yours Sincerely, Bruce Johnson
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  • moreover
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