Your child is going on a school trip abroad for three days and the headmaster of the school has asked any parents if they would like to come along to assist. You would like to go. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter: Say why you would like to go Suggest what you could do to help during the trip Ask some further questions about the trip

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accompany

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their children. Am very
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could be there with him so there will be less chance of missing his meds.
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was working in a construction company in the same city
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many towers am still in touch with them and
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Tower building which is the most common visitors attraction.I can certainly help you
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a
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would like to
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park office are they open or still close? Have you finalized the departure dates ? Please feel free to revert me looking forward
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your response. Yours Sincerely, Bruce Johnson

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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