Findings show that many criminals have low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prisons so that they can get job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In our current modern world, the level of
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a person has had proved to be a deciding factor in
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lives. It has been noted that prisoners are more likely to be holding a lower level of
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than average. Educating inmates could be a powerful tool in reducing crimes, as those
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would have less of a reason to commit
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in the
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place. Economic status and
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are strongly connected.
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low levels
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of
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tend to have a harder time making money and making a good living, which could in turn force them to do
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such
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as robbery and theft.
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, in the novel Les Miserable, the main character had to steal bread only for the mere reason of survival. Providing
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institutes may help provide job opportunities for the
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, elevating their economic and social class, as well as diminishing unnecessary crime. Knowledge is a defining factor between ignorance and open-
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mindedness
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who lack
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tend to
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be on the ignorant side of the spectrum.
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, they tend to do more wreckless yet possibly impactful mistakes.
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6 figures including Versace, lacked any
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professional
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knowledge
as he was only caged in his own ignorance, eventually
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crimes he probably wouldn't have thought of if deemed the right
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. In my opinion,
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vaccinated
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should be provided with tools to better their level of general
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the pure essence of punishment in prison will not make them better
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recidivism
  • reintegration
  • rehabilitation
  • recidivist
  • vocational training
  • societal reintegration
  • preventive measures
  • holistic approach
  • root causes
  • self-discipline
  • addressing socio-economic issues
  • inmate education programs
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