Some teenagers prefer to confide in their parents. Others have faith in their friends opinion only.

Today`s teenagers follow different role models. Some of them
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, while others choose their friends`. I strongly believe that every person`s opinion should be formed from both sides and their own experience. In the
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place, one of the most important relations is parent-teenager. Our parents are for sure the people who will always think for our sake
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friendship. Our friends are the ones who know all our secrets, problems and desires. Yet, they are still able to put a knife in our back. So, we always have to think before listening to someone. Taking everything into account, forming the right opinion isn't easy at all. In my view ,
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are the most important,
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we shouldn`t underestimate our
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. But after all our own thoughts and experience are the main ingredients for our opinion.
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