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What are the advantage and disadvantages of working in the city and in the country?

#advantage #city #country
Nowadays, working in the city or in the country is
actual
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 issue among
of
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young people.
Majority
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 want to have good jobs, prestigious
workplace
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workplaces
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also
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 benefits to live.
However
, it is impossible to find all of these points only in the urban areas or countryside.
This
 essay aims to mention the pros and cons of living and working in the countrified or citified regions. On one hand, there are many facilities to live in the cities apart from
work
. In urban areas, there are humans who can get quality education, there are lots of opportunities
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as
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high quality
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 education, better
medicine
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 services and entertainment activities
which
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that
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 humans can get.
For example
, the field of education has too many directions to study in colleges and universities,
also
 there are a number of beautiful places
as
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 parks, art galleries and museums to spend leisure time.
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generally
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, in municipal areas, there is a brisk lifestyle.
On the other hand
, due to a large portion of
population
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the population
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 and big factories in the metropolitan regions, there is bad pollution, many traffic jams and much noise
of
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streets
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the streets
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. For many, it is so much
stressful
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.
For instance
, traffic jams are
cause
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the cause
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 of being late to
work
, school or appointment,
furthermore
, noisy streets will not let
citizen
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citizens
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 take a rest at home, even though most
of
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people
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the people
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 want to live and
work
 in the cities. In conclusion, the
work
 in the citified regions gives many possibilities, but there are not
little
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 negative aspects of city life which
does
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 not exist in the villages. In my opinion, I would like to enjoy going to
country
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the country
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 on holiday because I choose to
work
 and live in the town.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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