In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

nowadays, many
people
value the idea of becoming a homeowner
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being a tenant. it is often thought to be a bad idea to rent an apartment rather than buy it. from my point of view,
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disagree with
this
perspective. homeownership is preferred in some east
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countries
such
as
vietnam
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because it is considered by many to be property. they are responsible for serving
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their children. in rented homes for a lifetime, many
people
will
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consider
it a failure in life. the rented house can
also
be driven by an unstable economy, causing a sense of insecurity
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foe
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residents about risks
such
as loss
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job
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or increase
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price
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. owning a shelter is safer than renting without knowing if the landlord will increase the rent.
however
, not everyone can afford to buy a house, many
people
must take out
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mortgage
mortgages
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to buy.
this
makes their life
ore
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stressful, so
people
can not comfortably spend on themselves
such
as buying clothes or
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.
moreover
, the pressure of earning money to repay the debt makes it difficult for
people
to visit their
family
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. if you work far away, you will miss the time with them. in short,
although
house ownership has spiritual benefits for individual owners, economically it is not good
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people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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