Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
fast-paced life , there has been much discussion revolving around the issue of whether employees should switch their
job
frequently or not. Some people believe that working for the same employer for a long time could bring numerous benefits while others come up with
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contrasting view. In
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my opinion will be given. On the one hand , some opponents opine that the merits of changing jobs are apparent.
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of all ,
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exposed to
different
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working
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, workers could expand their network and broaden their horizons.
Secondly
, since they have
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professionals who come from differing backgrounds , they could take advantage to uplift their expertise.
In other words
, their thinking skills are not stagnant anymore as their capabilities are not limited.
In addition
, when it comes to the organization side , having diverse-skilled workers ultimately boosts overall proliferation.
On the other hand
, some proponents who view traditionally , and are reluctant to take risks assert that serving long-service literally
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not only individuals but
also
companies and society.
Firstly
, staff could save their time for
job
hunting and adaptation.
Furthermore
, the company will not have a hectic schedule
such
as CV screening and training the fresh member. s a result of
this
, the organization could create a happy and productive workforce in which each member knows individuals’ strengths and weaknesses. Having both arguments considered ,
although
frequent
job
switch can pose reasonable advantages individually , in my humble opinion , employees should work for the same
job
as there is still scarce to get a
job
in
this
competitive world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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