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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to make vehicle drivers to take a test every year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the salad days of the millennium,
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society os divided into two groups, almost equally regarding the notion
that
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 whether a driving
test
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 should be taken every year to enhance the safety on
road
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 or not. Different people have distinct mindsets. In the following paragraphs, I
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 shed light on both of these opinions before making a final conclusion.
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 with, there are numerous downsides to
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, it will have a negative impact on the financial stability of many households as there are some expenses related to giving a
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.
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, it would be a kind of harassment of people because they had already passed the
test
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 once and they need to waste their precious time
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giving
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 the
test
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 again
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 a skill they already possess and are certified
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.
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, it would
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 put an extra burden on the transportation department which could be used to address the more common causes of
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 accidents. On the flip side of the coin, there are some advantages to
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 as well. First of all, the government will get to know about the people who are not able or eligible to drive anymore and
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 will take
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actions
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 against them which could help in reducing
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road
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 accidents.
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, it is observed in many parts of the world, that senior citizens are still driving their vehicles even after a certain age when they are not allowed to.
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, it would make the transport department more robust and provide high employment opportunities as the workload
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. In conclusion, I personally feel,
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 the aforementioned facts, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. Some other measures should be taken to enhance the safety on
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such
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 as increasing the minimum legal age to drive motor vehicles.

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language
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content
Consider expanding your points with more detailed explanations or examples to strengthen arguments.
style
Ensure that you maintain a more formal tone and clarity throughout the essay.
structure
The essay presents a clear structure with distinct paragraphs for different ideas.
content
Relevant examples are included, particularly regarding senior citizens and their driving capabilities.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • vehicle drivers
  • take a test
  • up-to-date
  • rules and regulations
  • driving skills
  • identify
  • issues
  • problems
  • financially burdensome
  • behavior on the road
  • performance in a test
  • road infrastructure
  • enforcement of traffic laws
  • accompany
  • measures
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