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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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Nowadays a lot of students before entering university take a gap
year
 in order to travel or do some work that can help them with attaining experience. I strongly believe it is a great mindset because during that period they can make some revelations for themselves and comprehend better what works for them and what doesn’t because choosing a profession is a tough question. Travelling is one of the ways that students prefer to do before university studies.
This
 gives an opportunity to discover new places, new hobbies and
moreover
, to uncover themselves and start dealing with adult life.
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this
 will open a wide horizon to see the differences between
diffferent
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different
 cities and countries. When it comes to working it’s another way to fill the gap
year
. I guess it’s a great method to understand your interests and obtain experience which will help later not only in the studies but
also
 in the work that they will be involved in the future. Because school-university transition isn’t easy. Schools don’t provide conditions for pupils to get to know what working represents itself. So one
year
 trying yourself in different
fieds
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fields
 will aim at developing your skills and
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 acquainted with
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labor
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 market. To sum up, I can say with confidence that the number of students who take a gap
year
 before entering university will find their place in the employment field easier than others.
Besides
, they will undergo practice and development in the field they are interested in and be more demanded.
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