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More and more students choose to move to other countries to study their higher education. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh its disadvantages?

#students #move #countries #study #education #outweigh
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It is true, that most students nowadays prefer to
study
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 abroad in order to get
Bachalor's
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Bachelor's
 or Master's degree.
People
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 argue and dispute about
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 topic, whether they must
study
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 in their
country
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 or in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
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? On the one hand, studying abroad
defenitely
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definitely
 benefits and allows
for
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students a lot of opportunities.
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, they become familiar with foreign culture, history, lifestyle, learn their language easily, which helps them to broaden their mind and to become well- known person.
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, doors of universities from all over the world are open for learners,
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they
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offer entrances to a
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wide
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vide
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wide
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 range of
study
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 fields. These opportunities
attracts
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 applicants from overseas and they move to another
country
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.
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, it is really surprising to choose
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study
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to study
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 in another
country
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, when there
many
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are many
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 universities, colleges or institutions in
motherland
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the motherland
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.
Drawbacks
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The drawbacks
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 of studying abroad
is
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 high.
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, the contract of foreign universities, cost of
accomodation
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accommodation
 and other living needs are expensive, to get
diploma
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a diploma
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really
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is really
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 difficult and it is another problem.
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, with
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 diploma students with a huge forecast cannot apply for a job in their
country
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. To pay for them they have to work in their free time
instead
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 of studying their subject and it leads to
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge but spending money. Parents have to support with money their son or daughter. To conclude, I realize that studying in another continent or neighbour
country
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 has more plus than
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a minus
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,
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because I believe, that
people
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 who
study
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 abroad have a chance to increase not only love for their motherland, in spite of the fact that they miss
people
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, way of living in their hometown, but
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 they respect
people
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 from overseas.
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