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Labour-saving devices such as dishwashers and communication tools such as computers are supposed to make our lives easier. However, some people argue that these devices only make them more difficult. Does modern technology reduce or increase stress? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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It is often argued that modern automation improved the community's lifestyles in every field
such
 as social communication or labour-saving washing equipment. Some public believe that these things only make problems in nation's
life
.
This
 essay will discuss the impact of machinery on public health.
Firstly
, there is no doubt that advanced machinery makes the community's
life
 easier compared to the past. population communicate with relatives or employees by sitting at home through laptops so it is a reliable way to send information to each other.
Moreover
, students earn knowledge of various topics from the internet they learn these skills from many sites
such
 as Youtube and Coursera. Many professionals expand learn through online sites which help them to get desired jobs.
On the other hand
, many labour saving devices are available in the market that women use
such
 as dishwashers for cleaning utensils. These devices no doubt saves time and benefits economically, but they make people's
life
 difficult in various ways
such
 as increasing unemployment and stress in
life
. I believe that advanced technology reduces the labour market in every field so people become stressed due to finding jobs. To conclude, there are many benefits of modern technology
such
 as reliability and fast but there
is
Change the verb form
are
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 other impacts that increase stress in human
life
 by reducing employment opportunities.
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