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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people believe that learning online is a better way to learn than attending a class with a teacher. To extent do you agree or disagree

#computers #education #people #class #teacher
Since technology develops faster and more powerful, many
students
 and educators use the Internet to
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extent
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 the possibility of different
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instead
 of teaching in real classrooms. I generally disagree that traditional education is inferior
than
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 online
classes
. It could be argued that online
classes
 can be used in various ways and across the boundaries of different countries. Regardless, taking lessons on the net is not an effective way
to
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 everyone,
also
 has many limitations.
For example
, numerous undeveloped or developing countries do not have
complete
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 network
system
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 so they do not enjoy the same quality as developed countries.
Besides
,
a
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half of online
classes
 are recorded previously, people may not have interactions if they want to inquire questions.
However
, some supporters claim that online
classes
 can be applied in
living
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 way, especially during the pandemic period, or leave the questions in
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comment
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.
Nevertheless
,
students
 not only need more than experts’ knowledge but
also
 have problems in their reality. Teachers’ experiences can assist
students
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textbooks’
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 questions and the issues which
students
 suffered before.
In addition
,
students
 can interact with their peers in classrooms,
it
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 can help them to increase
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 ability
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. In conclusion, education can be transformed into many ways to educate people who are not available to be in classrooms. In spite
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, traditional teaching method still can not be replaced in
online
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 way which
do
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 not have
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 function as joining the relationship
of
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students
 and teachers.
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