The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics.

The graphs below show the number of medals won by the top five countries in the summer and winter Olympics.
The first bar chart shows which countries have won the most
medals
in the winter
Olympics
. It
also
states how many gold, silver and bronze
medals
each country has achieved.
In contrast
, the
second
graph shows which nations have won the most
medals
in the summer
Olympics
.
Overall
, the first graph shows that in the winter
Olympics
, Norway
has
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gained the most
medals
, winning approximately an equal number of gold, silver and bronze
medals
. It has won about 370
medals
,
whereas
Canada, in fifth place, has won approximately 200
medals
. The results of the summer
Olympics
are quite different,
however
, with the USA having won the most
medals
.
Overall
, the USA has won just over 2,500
medals
, a much higher number than the other four countries on the graph. Russia is the
second
highest, winning approximately 1,800
medals
. To summarise, the bar charts illustrate how many
medals
the highest-ranking countries have won in the summer and winter
Olympics
. The results of each
Olympics
are very different, with the USA, Russia and Germany being successful in both.
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