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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #years #time #people’s #lives #adult #life #happiness #spite #responsibility
It is argued about which generation of
life
were
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 a person felt
more
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happier; the teenage years or
adult
life
.
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that younger days
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that younger day
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 are
more
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happier because of the group of friends, and
adult
life
 is enjoyable despite responsibilities because of no restrictions. The young people
enjoys
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because
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 of the friendship that they are starting to build.
This
 is to say that normally the
teenagers
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teenager's
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 group themselves together with people that they believe they can get along with as well as they can trust.
Furthermore
, with sleep-over because of the academic project sometimes the assignment project becomes the insight of telling secret crushes.
For instance
, I remember during our group project meeting, my friends and I just talked for days because of her secret admirer and
I
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until now when we do memory lane, we laugh about it.
On the other hand
,
adult
life
 has fun days
also
 because there
are
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 no
constraint
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constraints
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.
This
 is because
that
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this people
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this person
these people
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 can act whatever they want, and
in addition
, they can perform what exactly comes
with
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 their
mind
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minds
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 without any permission
with
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from
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 the older ones.
However
,
this
 happiness is fleeting because when reality hit about the duties and responsibilities
being
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of being
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 an
adult
.
For example
, my big brother,
he
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apply
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is used
of
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to
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party
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the party
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, and when he
realise
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 that he is a family man the time that it
strike
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 him. In conclusion,
This
 essay supports that the teenage years are
more
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happier because of the company of friends, while adults
life
 experience happiness because of no boundaries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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