Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is argued about which generation of

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a person felt

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happier; the teenage years or

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life

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happier because of the group of friends, and

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is enjoyable despite responsibilities because of no restrictions. The young people

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of the friendship that they are starting to build.

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is to say that normally the

teenagers

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group themselves together with people that they believe they can get along with as well as they can trust.

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, with sleep-over because of the academic project sometimes the assignment project becomes the insight of telling secret crushes.

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, I remember during our group project meeting, my friends and I just talked for days because of her secret admirer and

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until now when we do memory lane, we laugh about it.

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adult

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life

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has fun days

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this people

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can act whatever they want, and

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, they can perform what exactly comes

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without any permission

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the older ones.

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happiness is fleeting because when reality hit about the duties and responsibilities

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adult

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, my big brother,

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party

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, and when he

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that he is a family man the time that it

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him. In conclusion,

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happier because of the company of friends, while adults

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experience happiness because of no boundaries.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

257 words

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