The values that we learn from our parents and family have greater influence on our future success than knowledge and skills we learn at school. Agree or disagee?

It is generally acknowledged by certain individuals that the

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acquisition

of

knowledg

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knowledge

from family is more valuable than that from

schools

for

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successful future in contemporary society.

However

, regarding

this

, I strongly disagree with

this

assertion as I believe that a successful life means having

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extraordinary occupation.

To begin

with, learning various academic subjects can bring about

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prestigious

university

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among students in

this

competitive society. Going to a reputational university can be a stepping stone to

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forward to success. Adolescents are not able to go to

the

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higher-educational institution that has a good reputation with skills that are learned from parents.

For example

, Recent media in Korea reports that parents can not replace by

schools

as they are not professionals in various majors. As the example clearly illustrates,

knowledge

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the knowledge

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that is

provided by parents is less important than that by

schools

.

Moreover

, learning practical skills can be a key factor in obtaining well-paid jobs. As the population has increased, job opportunities have declined, and

therefore

candidates need

further

qualifications. Having experience or having acquired soft skills that can be valuable to a company can put one ahead of

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games

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when applying for a position.

For instance

, a survey conducted by the Korea Educational Foundation has revealed that almost 20%

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of respondents

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answered that learning

softskills

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soft skills

when students participate in group activities

such

as presentations at school can be an

efficients

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efficient

means of gaining

a highly-paid occupations

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.

Therefore

, it is reasonable to point out that knowledge

that is

acquired from

schools

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is more crucial than that from family. In conclusion, the shortage of jobs is

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undeniable issue in the modern era.

Therefore

, there is no doubt to point out that not only can

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at a school bring about going to a meritorious academy, it may

also

contribute to getting a better job, thereby leading to a successful life.