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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast foods. this has a negative impact on families, individuals and societies. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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food
 replaces traditional
food
 in many countries. Individuals, society and families have a negative impact because of
this
. I strongly agree with that statement.
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harmful effects of these types of meals.
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food
 has a great reputation and popularity between teenagers and students. Cheapest than traditional
food
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fast
food
 is one of the things on which many people can spend their money.
However
,
this
 variant may look cool and has enough reasons to eat, it has harmful elements with a lot of fat. More and more people get bigger and have much fat
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 the others who love to eat
this
 type of
food
 and publish the photos on social media. Having a good amount of weight is not an enormous problem and
this
 should depend on a person's decision. The problem emerges when the weight is too much and causes illnesses
such
 as obesity. Obesity is a disorder in which a person gains excessive weight... In conclusion, a number of people can have the opinion that
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fast
food
 is a significant
food
 in whole life, but they should know about the negative influence of them to person's body.
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