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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can government and individuals take to tackle the issue.

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It is clear that
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 the world forces terrible environmental issue
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that
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is
the
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global warming and
therefore
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government
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governments
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 and person
both
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should take
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action for
this
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 situation. In
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 essay,
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 will highlight the reasons and suggest solutions. In terms of the reason, factories usually
use
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 fossil fuels
such
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 as coal, oil and natural
gas
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 to generate great output, but the obvious downside is producing
carbon
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 dioxide
gas
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.
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therefore
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, the greenhouse effect appeared and
lead
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 to
rising
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up
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 the global temperature. As for the solution, the
government
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 should encourage factories to
use
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 clean
energy
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such
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 as light
energy
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, wind
energy
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 and tidy
energy
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 to produce.
For individuals
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,
they
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should limit their purchasing
desire
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 because whichever items, the process of manufacture and transportation always produce
carbon
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 dioxide. With regards to another reason,
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uncontrolled logging
make
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carbon
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 emission rise up because trees can absorb
carbon
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 dioxide
gas
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 and turn it into oxygen
gas
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. Losing the help of photosynthesis will
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 eliminate the economy. Talking to the solution, the
government
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 should enforce severe punishment which aims to log and invest in planting trees. On top of that, residents should keep hobbies of being environmental. They can
use
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 recycled products
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 as canvas bags and reusable chopsticks. In conclusion, the main reason for global warming is excess
carbon
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emission
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emissions
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. It is caused by industries and
also
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 is the result of logging. To ease the problem individuals should learn about green travel and keep a low-
carbon
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 style. For
government
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,
they
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should order industries to
use
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 clean
energy
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 and enforce laws to control cutting down trees.

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coherence cohesion
The essay provides an adequate level of coherence and cohesion, with a clear logical structure. However, the introduction and conclusion could be strengthened to better guide the reader. Additionally, more specific examples could be included to support the ideas presented.
task response
The response addresses the task, covering the causes of global warming and suggesting measures for both government and individuals. However, the examples and ideas presented could be more comprehensive and detailed to fully address the task requirements.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses a mix of general and specific lexical items. It could benefit from more precise and accurate word choices, particularly in scientific and environmental terminology.
grammatical range
The essay shows a varied and mostly accurate use of grammatical structures. However, there are instances of tense inconsistencies and errors in subject-verb agreement. Greater attention to accuracy and consistency is needed to achieve a higher score.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burning of fossil fuels
  • greenhouse gases
  • trap heat
  • atmosphere
  • deforestation
  • carbon dioxide
  • greenhouse effect
  • industrial activities
  • agricultural practices
  • carbon emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental regulations
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • lifestyle changes
  • public transportation
  • recycling
  • conserving energy
  • LED bulbs
  • plant-based diet
  • raising awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • international cooperation
  • Paris Agreement
  • mitigate
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