«Some people think that governments should spend more money on sports facilities for top athletes. Others argue that this money should be spent for sports facilities for ordinary people. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.»

According to some
people
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the government should invest
money
in
sports
facilities
for athletes but for
others
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,others
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this
money
should be invested in
sports
facilities
for ordinary
people
. In my
opinion
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it is important to spend
money
for both equally.
Sports
play a key role in human life. On the one hand,it is unable to that investing
money
for
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in
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sports
facilities
for everybody.
First
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the
people
would improve their health.
As a result
the improvement of the population's health condition and physical fitness.
On the other hand
,some reasons to invest in
sports
facilities
for ordinary
people
.The main reason is nowadays individuals
whom
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inactive lifestyle increasing day by day.So that,the government could be able to organise group activities;
for example
yoga,boxing. In conclusion,I believe that government should spend
money
on both
sports
facilities
because they can bring many benefits to
people
and the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • elite sports facilities
  • national pride
  • international events
  • participation
  • high-quality
  • performance
  • national representation
  • fairness
  • social issues
  • population health
  • well-being
  • accessible
  • inclusive
  • community involvement
  • sponsorship
  • endorsements
  • recreational facilities
  • inspire
  • younger generations
  • serious pursuit
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