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Some people believe that to protect local culture, tourism should be banned in some areas whereas others think that change is inevitable and banning tourism will have no benefits. Discuss both sides and gives your opinion

#people #culture #tourism #areas #change
Culture
 enhances
quality
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the quality
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 of life and increases
overall
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the overall
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 well-being of the individuals and communities.
Human
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A human
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 being without
culture
 is no less than an animal. It is argued that
tourism
 should be forbidden to safeguard localised
culture
 in a few
places
.I strongly disagree with the given statement as
change
 is constant and prohibiting
the
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apply
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tourism
 is not the solution for it. We will discuss
in
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this in
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details
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 in the following paragraphs. On
one
 hand, without
tourism
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,tourism
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 the place will be untouched and remain peaceful and beautiful. A research paper found that the
places
 which are less witnessed by human beings are 75% more clean and beautiful as it is not commercialised. To illustrate
this
,
most
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the most
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 common hill
station
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stations
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 in India like Shimla, Ooty, Manali and so on are
more dirty
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dirtier
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 in comparison to
places
 like Chail and Landsdowne.
Additionally
,
culture
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the culture
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 in those
places
 is far deeper to understand. With the introduction of
Tourism
, innocent
lives
 will be in danger and hunting is
also
very
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a very
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 common offence committed by individuals which disturbs the
lives
 of the natives.
On the other hand
,
Change
 is the real constant and no
one
 can put a stop
on
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to
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 it.
On
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In
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one
way
 or the other
way
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 things will definitely
change
.
Tourism
 is just not a
way
 of making
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one understand
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understand
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understanding
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one
's
culture
 but
also
 a
way
 of growing with the advancement of technology in various fields.
For instance
, in the interior
places
 of Andaman and Nicobar Islands,
people
has
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 no access to medicines to save their
lives
 and no good means of transport and communication to make their
lives
 easy and comfortable.
Moreover
,
people
 will not be able to grow in the field of Education, Science and Technology and so on. Human has a tendency to grow by sharpening their minds and
change
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changing
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the
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their
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 surroundings with
the
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inventions and discoveries. Through
tourism
,
lot
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a lot
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 of problems of the
people
 can be solved with
the
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apply
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employment and getting the world
more
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apply
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closely.
Although
people
 will always be in search of new
places
 and cultures as they have a curiosity to know more and more, it is the responsibility of the individuals to preserve our
culture
 from getting destroyed.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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