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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#women #childcare #men #focus #children #life
Nature's design and thousands of years of evolution have made
women
 better at
childcare
 than men. Even though
this
 might be a scientific fact, in today's world the
work
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life
 of
women
 is equally important
than
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as
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 their personal
life
.
Therefore
, I completely
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disagree
agree
 that
women
 should spend more time
on
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raising
children
 and sacrifice their
work
life
. Many solutions can help
women
 balance their
work
 and personal
life
.
Few
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 examples are
:
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 Flexible working hours and
Joint
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a Joint
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 family system.
Firstly
, all corporates are working towards favourable working conditions for
women
.
This
 includes having policies
which
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that
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 will help
women
 not
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loose
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lose
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 their job in order to concentrate on taking care of their
children
.
For example
, giving freedom, by having flexible working hours and / or having a
day care
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daycare
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 centre at the office.
This
 will ease the pressure on a
woman
 to have a
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balanced
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balance
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balanced
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life
.
Secondly
,
childcare
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is
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it
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is
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 not only a
woman
's responsibility but a man's too. A husband should
also
 equally participate in
childcare
 which will reduce some burden
from
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 a
woman
. But,
this
 has limited
benefit
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benefits
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 as the husband needs to go out
for
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work
 too. In
this
 scenario, it becomes important to once
agaian
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again
 embrace the joint family system. Having the entire family living together will not only help
women
 in sharing the
work
 to raise a child and household chores but
also
 help nurture
children
 because they will learn a lot from their grandparents and others. To conclude, in today's time
childcare
 is a job for both men and
women
. I strongly
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disagree
 that only
women
 have to compromise.
With certain
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 assistance from corporates on policies and environment will reduce
women
's stress levels.
Moreover
, taking care of
children
 by family members
such
 as
husband
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husbands
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 and grandparents will have huge benefits on a child's development and give more free time to a
woman
 to focus on her
work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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