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Traffic congestion is becoming more and more common in urban areas. What are the causes? What solutions can be adopted to solve this problem?

#traffic #congestion #areas
Recently years,
traffic
playes
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plays
played
players
one
 of the main roles in our life. In my opinion, there are
few
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 causes
for
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traffic
 congestion. At
first
, the poor condition and lack of public transport
is
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are
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one
 of the
most
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biggest causes of
traffic
 congestion. Because of that most
of
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people
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the people
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 use their own private cars in order to go everywhere they want
instead
 of using
by
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apply
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public transport.
In addition
, the concentration of population to the
city
 from
countryside
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the countryside
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 is becoming an another biggest
causes
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cause
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. Nowadays, many
people
 shifted to the
city
 from the
countryside
 in order to get
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a job
the job
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job
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jobs
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, better education and build
the
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 better modern
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
As a result
, by
increasing
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an increasing
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 number of
people
 and personal cars in the
city
.
However
, there
are
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number
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a number
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 of measures
which
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that
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 can be taken to tackle these problems.
One
soluation
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solution
 could be that
Government
 should increase the taxes on private cars and use the money for improving public transport services.
Also
, the
Government
 should more concentrate on
movement
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the movement
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 of the
people
 and take some measures to restrict moving from the
countryside
 to the
city
.
One
 of the measures which can be taken by the
Government
 is
develop
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countryside
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the countryside
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 and improve living, working and studying conditions in
countryside
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the countryside
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. In conclusion, even
traffic
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though traffic
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 congestion is becoming more common in urban
ares
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areas
, the
government
 can tackle
this
 issue in
short
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a short
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 time.
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